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lathrielI heard back from the agent who requested more. Rejected again- but she actually gave feedback! Apparently, she doesn't like the way I jump in time- the prologue is "present" and the first two chapters are "past." I can dig that- I was always unsettled on the prologue, but I think it's a good way to start the book. But she did like the prologue because it has more action (that's because it's from the middle of the book...). So... it's good.
I've got mixed feelings on this- on the one hand I want to be objective, but on the other she says "there's more telling than showing (in the chapters)" when I think there's too much telling in the prologue. Hmm. Conflict.
Is she suggesting the first two chapters shouldn't be there? I don't think that'd work. That's where I feel I do the best showing- and there's a lot that needs to be shown. If the prologue draws you in, wouldn't you be willing to deal with a jump in time?
< grumble > Stephenie Meyer starts all her books with a scene from the middle that's pretty much exactly the same as when you come to it in the book. < /grumble > At least mine is from the M.C.'s perspective, which you don't get to read from again until the very last scene. When you come across the same scene later in the book there's a much different perspective on what happens.
I'm willing to edit my work. Perhaps another read is necessary? Not this month, but some time in the near future. Of course, as she even points out in her reply, publishing tastes vary widely so I shouldn't be discouraged. I'm not :)
I've got mixed feelings on this- on the one hand I want to be objective, but on the other she says "there's more telling than showing (in the chapters)" when I think there's too much telling in the prologue. Hmm. Conflict.
Is she suggesting the first two chapters shouldn't be there? I don't think that'd work. That's where I feel I do the best showing- and there's a lot that needs to be shown. If the prologue draws you in, wouldn't you be willing to deal with a jump in time?
< grumble > Stephenie Meyer starts all her books with a scene from the middle that's pretty much exactly the same as when you come to it in the book. < /grumble > At least mine is from the M.C.'s perspective, which you don't get to read from again until the very last scene. When you come across the same scene later in the book there's a much different perspective on what happens.
I'm willing to edit my work. Perhaps another read is necessary? Not this month, but some time in the near future. Of course, as she even points out in her reply, publishing tastes vary widely so I shouldn't be discouraged. I'm not :)
